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Salut, moi qui suis fort en anglais, pourrais te corriger ces fautes. J'en vois plusieurs. Je vais refaire ton texte en corrigeant tout.
My name is Abby Adana, i'm seventeen years old, I have red hair, blue eyes and white skin. I live in Boston and i study at the Newman School, A car accident takes my parent, James and Nathalie Adana to heaven when i was about 5 months I live with my grandmother. Susan is her name, i do love her, she's always smiling, she's always here for listenning to me, she is a small lady, she makes young for her age.
She thinks i'm pretty with my red hair like fire, blue eyes like the ocean and my white skin like snow.
But I do not agree with her. Anyway, My life changed on the Saturday September the twenty two, i was so excited because my grandmother buys me a ticket for Coldplay's concert.
I remember i had a great time before this terrifying storm arrived and ruin the concert. Everybody ran away and crying then i get stuck by a lightening. It was so strange I didn't feel anything except for scared and tired I asked myself because i should go to the hospital but , all that i wanted to do is to leave from here and sleep. Then i get back to my home I am going to bed
And then i was dreaming,i was alone, scared , cold in a place where there were no life, there were a tree died, no vegetation, black clouds everything was dry and dark . I know that I have to bring this place to live. So I raise my hands up and give water for making a river, wind for move the black clouds, fire for warm this cold place and I saw the tree get up from the earth.
This is how my life start to change. Now i'm still Abby Adana but I've super powers, i can do a lot of things, like fly, throw fireballs, I can breath under water, I can make a tornado,
And then i get this super powers i feel strong and brave
Attention, tu oublies des virgules à certaines endroits et les ''I'' doivent être en majuscule.
My name is Abby Adana, i'm seventeen years old, I have red hair, blue eyes and white skin. I live in Boston and i study at the Newman School, A car accident takes my parent, James and Nathalie Adana to heaven when i was about 5 months I live with my grandmother. Susan is her name, i do love her, she's always smiling, she's always here for listenning to me, she is a small lady, she makes young for her age.
She thinks i'm pretty with my red hair like fire, blue eyes like the ocean and my white skin like snow.
But I do not agree with her. Anyway, My life changed on the Saturday September the twenty two, i was so excited because my grandmother buys me a ticket for Coldplay's concert.
I remember i had a great time before this terrifying storm arrived and ruin the concert. Everybody ran away and crying then i get stuck by a lightening. It was so strange I didn't feel anything except for scared and tired I asked myself because i should go to the hospital but , all that i wanted to do is to leave from here and sleep. Then i get back to my home I am going to bed
And then i was dreaming,i was alone, scared , cold in a place where there were no life, there were a tree died, no vegetation, black clouds everything was dry and dark . I know that I have to bring this place to live. So I raise my hands up and give water for making a river, wind for move the black clouds, fire for warm this cold place and I saw the tree get up from the earth.
This is how my life start to change. Now i'm still Abby Adana but I've super powers, i can do a lot of things, like fly, throw fireballs, I can breath under water, I can make a tornado,
And then i get this super powers i feel strong and brave
Attention, tu oublies des virgules à certaines endroits et les ''I'' doivent être en majuscule.
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