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GIOGIR1VIZ
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bonjour alors un devoir en anglais où je dois faire un texte on s'inspirant de histoire du titanic je fait qu'est ce que vous pouvez me corriger merci d'avance ::::: alors: hello my name was rosela i was born 1896 i was 21 at time in( 1912) i wanded to settle in America because i wanted realize my dream become stylist i was travelling with my uncle my freind i was survived but my family didn’t i was sharing a cabin with 3 other girls i was sleeping .i didn't realize the situation but à felt the shock but i didn't panic bacause the titanic was unsinkable. the lookout saw the iceberg a few metters the titanic turned but hit the iceberg. the pessengers began panic and they put the life jackets on.the crew quickly panicked because the ship was sinking fast . the rich woman and children started to embark on the first lifeboats. while the poor passengers were locked bahind gates .the orchestra was playing. the pessengers were terrified and the people were crying shouting and running erevy where .the people were extremely sad because they abondened some family everybody in freezing Water there was dead bodies i was traumatized bacause i didn't want to death. i went into one the last lifeboats. il was with 6 crew members who were rowing the lifeboat. around them, they could see the other lifeboats and lots of icebergs. the ocean was quiet. suddenly, they heard a terrible noise. the ship broke in two and both parts rose in the air. then it sank. it was a frightful vision . A few hours later me and the other survivors were picked up by the Carpathia. ... voilà corriger moi svp

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NATHEAVIZ
bonjour

My name is Rosella and I was born in 1896. When I was 21, in 1912, I decided to settle in America to realize my dream and become a stylist. I was travelling with my uncle and my friends. I survived fro this tragedy but no one from my family did. I was sharing my cabin with three other girls, we were sleeping.
I didn't realize at once the situation when I felt the shock, I didn't panicked because I had been told the Titanic was unsinkable. Then we saw the iceberg a few meters from us. The Titanic tried to turn but hit it.
All the passengers began to freak out  (pour pas répéter 2 fois "panic")and put their life jackets on. The crew also panicked because the boat was sinking fast.
Rich women and their kids were the first one to go on the first life boats while the poor passengers were locked behind gates.
The orchestra was still playing. Everyone was terrified, running and shouting
everywhere. Some were crying because they already didn't know where their family was. Some people had died in the freezing water.
I was traumatized because I didn't want to die. I went into the last lifeboat with six crew members rowing the boat.
Around us, there were the other life boats, the ocean was quiet.
Suddenly we heard a terrible roaring (rugissant) noise....The ship had broken in two parts and each rose in the air before sinking.
A few hour after, all the survivors including me were picked up by the Carpathia (???)


bonne soirée :)

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