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EO PLACE AND FORMS OF POWER

First of all I introduce this notion with the motto by the Suffragettes: “Deeds not words!”
Right, so I m going to tackle the notion of places and forms of power. To begin with, I d like to give a definition of the word power. Power can be defined as the ability to control others or to make things happen. It can be political, economical, moral, or military. It synonymous with strength. And can be defined place like important buildings or a person's rank.
We may wonder: “How have women reacted to gender inequality?”
First, I d like to show that women are under-represented
Then, I’d like to explain the gender stereotypes
BEFORE finally focusing on from past to present
At last, I will conclude on this notion by giving my own opinion on the subject

First of all, we have studied about article concerning discrimination against women today. They depict our attention to the fact that women are under-represented in the government, then women are more likely to experience domestic violence than men and finally women tend to be poor than men. These documents based on US surveys make us become aware that the power is on the hand of the men on the government. Let’s see where does gender discrimination come from?

2 videos show us discrimination about men and women come from gender stereotypes and the gender gap. It raises the problem of boys and girls are excepted by society or religion to play certain roles and behave in certain ways according to their gender. These videos make us realize that the power’s men come from society. Finally, several groups of women stand up for themselves.

Despite the fact that women are still under-represented, the last documents show lot of women had fought for their rights. In UK, 2 groups who are “The suffragettes” and “the Dagenham Girls”, have fought for equality thanks to them the power of women has increased. Besides, there are celebrities have a role model for women bc they are spokesperson, they are influential and they speak for women who can’t access the media like Emma Watson. These girls and these movements are the prove of the empowerment!

To put it in a nutshell, as far as I’m concerned, I hold the opinion that since the gender stereotypes between the men and women are started, the women were became under-represented in the government but the with the time, improvements are still needed but thanks to some celebrities and some movement, the women are prove their force for most power on their side!