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Bonjour, j'ai un discours en anglais, et je passe devant la classe, j'ai quelque petites réticences.
J'ai énormément de difficulté et j'aimerai de l'aide pour corriger la première partie de mon discours sil vous plait. Merci d'avance :)
Mesdames et messieurs, camarades et élèves de la classe, Madame Bourdie, je vous remercie d'être présent aujourd'hui pour nous écouter. C'est un immense plaisir, pour nous deux, d'être face à vous cette après midi.
Je souhaiterai que l’homme que j’ai rencontré soit là aujourd’hui pour vous contez avec moi son histoire.
Mais quel homme ?
Tout commence au Soudan, quand le jeune garçon est enlevé à six ans à sa mère par l’Armée de Libération du Peuple Soudanais. Conduit en Ethiopie, il devient un enfant-soldat et combat avec les rebelles. A douze ans, il est gravement blessé au dos; son demi-frère le fait sortir clandestinement du Soudan et l’emmène dans un camp de réfugiés au Kenya, où une Française, après avoir entendu son histoire, aide les deux frères à partir France.
Pris en charge par les Nations Unies, Heliajah est accueilli dans la région de l’Occitanie.
Sur place, sa nouvelle vie prend forme: il apprend seul à lire à l’âge de 15 ans, choisit d’habiter dans sa voiture en «homme libre» et enfin entre dans une université pour y étudier le droit et devient avocat.
C’est alors que j’ai prit connaissance de son histoire, je me suis intéresser au cas des refugiés et je les contactais et nous nous sommes alors rencontrer.
Il pourrait vous dire a quel point c’est dure d’arriver après tant d’épreuves dans un Pays étranger pour lui.
Il pourrait vous dire à quoi cela ressemble d'essayer de vivre après avoir était arraché de votre famille par des hommes armés et pris comme un enfant-soldat à l’âge de 6ans.
Son objectif est aujourd’hui de «Protéger les autres». Compréhensible au regard de son parcours.
Son histoire ma particulièrement toucher.

et voila ma traduction:
Ladies and Gentlemen, companions and pupils of the class, Madam Bourdie, thank you to be present today to listen to us. It is an immense pleasure, for us two, to face(to be in front of) you this after noon(south).
I shall wish that the man whom I met is today for there you tell with me his(her,its) history(story).
But what man?
Everything begins in the Sudan, when the young boy is deprived of six years to her mother by the Liberation Army of the Sudanese People. Led(driven) in Ethiopia, he becomes a child-soldier and fights(disputes) with the rebels. At the age of twelve, he(it) is seriously injured in the back; his(her) half brother makes him(it) go out in secret of the Sudan and takes him(it) in a refugee camp in Kenya, where a Frenchwoman, having heard(understood) her history(story), helps both brothers to leave France.
Taken care by By United Nations, Heliajah is welcomed in the region of the Occitania.
On the spot, his new life takes form: he learns alone to read at the age of 15, chooses to live in his car in "free man" and finally enters a university to study the right there and becomes lawyer.
This is when I have acquainted with his history, I am to interest in the case of refugiés and I contacted them and we are then to meet.
He could tell you has which point it is hard to arrive after so many tests in a Foreign country for him.
He could tell you whom it looks like to try to live having was torn away from your family by men armed and taken as a child-soldier at the age of 6ans.
His objective is today "to Protect the others". Understandable with regard to his(her,its) route(course).
His(Her,Its) history(story) my particularly to affect(touch).


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bonjour,

c'est bien mais il y a quelques fautes, a cause des malformations des phrase:
 I shall wish that the man whom I met is today for there you tell with me his(her,its) history(story) :
I wish that the man whom I met, was here today, so that we could tell youguys his history 
he learns alone to read at the age of 15:

at the age of 15 he was a self taught reader

chooses to live in his car AS A "free man"

He could tell you whom it looks like to try to live having was torn away from your family by men armed and taken as a child-soldier at the age of 6 ans : 
he could tell you what it looks like to try to live, torned away from your family [...] at the age of 6.

He could tell you AT which point it is hard to arrive after so many tests in a Foreign country for him.


His(Her,Its) history(story) my particularly to affect(touch):
His story particularly touched me.
 sinon le reste est bon 

 Jespere que j'ai aider
C'est pas mal 


Ladies and gentlemen, comrades and students of the class, Mrs Bourdie, thank you for being here today to listen to us. It is a great pleasure for both of us to be with you this afternoon. I wish the man I met is here today to tell you his story. But what man? It all starts in Sudan, when the young boy is abducted at six years from his mother by the Sudanese People's Liberation Army. Driven to Ethiopia, he became a child soldier and fought with the rebels. At twelve years of age, he is seriously wounded on the back; Her half-brother brings her out of the Sudan and takes her to a refugee camp in Kenya, where a French woman, after hearing her story, helps the two brothers leave France. Supported by the United Nations, Heliajah is welcomed in the Occitan region. On the spot, his new life takes shape: he learns to read alone at the age of 15, chooses to live in his car as a "free man" and finally enters a university to study law and becomes a lawyer. It was then that I became aware of its history, I became interested in the case of the refugees and I contacted them and we met then. He could tell you how hard it is to arrive after so many trials in a foreign country for him. He could tell you what it feels like to try to live after being snatched from your family by armed men and taken as a child soldier at the age of six. Its objective today is "Protecting others". Understandable in terms of its course. His story particularly touched me.
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