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Bonsoir, est ce que quelqu'un pourrait corriger mon devoir d'anglais svp? (Mon sujet est de faire un article sur "une héroïne" que l'on a inventé en ventant ses actions).

Today we speak about a humanitarian fact and more particularly about a heroine. This one is called Kate ROBERT and it now has been ten years since she made a commitment as doctor without border. She was previously a general practitioner in London, but seeing that the things which took place in the world were more and more hideous, she decided to put a lot humanely. Indeed, she revealed in an exclusive interview that you will discover very soon that she wanted to feel useful for the others. Moreover, this one, heiress of these wealthy ancestors, decided to create a charitable foundation to finance medical but also nutritional aids in Third World countries. Thanks to this association of numerous wells, orphanages, hospitals and housing were able to be realized in Somalia, in Ethiopia, in Haiti, in Bangladesh and in Madagascar. Furthermore, numerous people suffering from malnutrition or from diseases due to the lack of hygiene were able to be cured. Kate is at present in Syria, country destroys by the war, where she hopes to build other arrangements to reconstruct the country and so facilitate the life of the Syrians. She so decided to give her life for the others, and for her it has no price. We can only encourage her in this way hoping that the world problems will decrease one day. If you want as Kate to act in your own way to save the humanity you can donate to her foundation “SOS the world is dying”.

Merci d'avance à ceux qui m'aideront.





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Salut, voic ma correction, les parenthèses sont pour les choses inutiles.

"Today we will be talking about about a humanitarian fact and more particularly about a heroine. She is called Kate ROBERT and it now has been ten years since she made a commitment to become a doctor without borders. She was previously a general practitioner in London, but seeing that the things which took place in the world were more and more hideous, she decided to put a lot of humanity. Indeed, she revealed in an exclusive interview, that you will discover very soon, that she wanted to be useful for (the) others. Moreover, (this one), heiress of these wealthy ancestors, decided to create a charitable foundation to finance medical but also nutritional aids in Third World countries. Thanks to this association, (of) numerous wells, orphanages, hospitals and houses could be realized in Somalia, in Ethiopia, in Haiti, in Bangladesh and in Madagascar. Furthermore, numerous people suffering from malnutrition or from diseases due to the lack of hygiene could be cured. Kate is now in Syria, country destroyed by the war, where she hopes to build other arrangements to reconstruct the country and to facilitate the life of the Syrians. She so decided to dedicate her life to the others, and for her, it has no price. We can only encourage her in this way hoping that the problems in the world will decrease one day. If you want to be like Kate to act in your own way to save the humanity, you can donate to her foundation “SOS the world is dying”. "

Je pense que c'est mieux de dire "So she decided" après pour le reste je ne vois pas de fautes (enfin je suppose)