Oral bac anglais - notion Myths and heroes /Mythes et héros

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Je passe l'oral du BAC d'anglais dans une semaine et j'aimerais avoir une vérification de l'oral ci-dessous s'il vous plait.
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I am going to talk about the concept of myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of this notion. A myth is a fictitious story which narrates the foundations of a given community. These narratives can convey the ideals of this community and create or perpetuate inspiring heroic figures. In this case, the concept of myths and heroes then serves a more profound purpose in our culture than mere fictional stories. To illustrate this, I have chosen to focus my thoughts on people who are really intent on making this a better place for all people, hence the link to myths with a character emboying an idea. So, I was wondering. To what extent do myths represent society’s values and how does heroes fit in those societies? Aiming at answering this issue, I will exhibit the life of two persons, which were living in the USA back in the 1950’s.
First and foremost, one cannot deny that society is based on founding myths; a collective identity forged around common landmarks and shared values. As elsewhere, but even more in the USA back then. You’re probably thinking: What does it have to do with a character? He’s talking about society! As a matter of fact, we have seen two different examples during class. Martin Luther King and Rosa Parks. Both of them were heroes, fighting against racism, which was, back then, a popular belief embodying the ideals and institutions of their society. Consequently, a myth ! They, Rosa Parks and Martin Luther King, represented the fight against racial segregation in the USA. It wasn’t unsuall when they were alive. Nevertheless, they managed to do something about it. Even though they lived in this society, embodying the ideals of this popular belief, which came from the Pilgrim Fathers, another document we studied aswell during class.
Rosa Parks was the first that launched this “revolutionary without violence courant” against racial segregation. She showed an extreme courage and bravery regarding the context she was in decades ago when she refused to give up her seat for a white guy. She fought injustice among the society and tried to change the ideals regarding black people. She was serving a more profound purpose than just herself and this is why she can be related as a hero.
During class, we have studied the speech “I have a dream ... “which referred to Martin Luther King. He is a relevant illustration of the notion of heroes as it shows how a single man has changed people’s minds. Indeed he put an end to decades of racial segregation and allowed the creation of the “civil rights act” or even “voting rights act “. »I have a dream ..." A dream that was similar to Gandhi and Mandela. Struggling for equality among peoples, blacks voting, and this, without violence. It really shows that a single man or women can change the ideas and ideals of a community. They are both examples of heroes which endorse egalitarianism to fulfill our dreams.
To put it in a nutshell, I think that myths represent society’s values in a way that it has a great impact on us, for example with the 1950 USA society, regarding racism or segregation. In our modern society, racism isn’t well seen at all, thanks to persons such as Martin Luther King, Rosa Parks, Mandela, or whoever that is and it seems to me that heroes influence the society, so as a result they influence mtyhs by their commitment to defend and promote honorable values. Thanks their prominent presence, they act as model. However, even if you may get some inspiration from mystical stories and iconic figures, in the end you will have to face reality and be aware of the imperfection of mankind. In this way, we could also regard racism as being still present in our world.
Merci bien !