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Notion spaces and exchanges

Introduction :
I'm going to talk about the notion of Spaces and exchanges. To begin with, I would like to give a definition of this concept : the notion of spaces and exchanges can be understood talking about the geographical and symbolic areas that all societies occupy and the interactions between men and different societies.
What is the motivation for traveling and for what purposes?
To illustrate this we may wonder if a gap year can be a rewarding experience. I’m going to speak about the advantages and drawbacks that the Erasmus exchange programme can contain, secondly, we will see what are the means to survive an endangered language.

 Nowadays, students still travel for the same reasons thanks to European exchanges programs. Moreover the number of student has increased like the number of programs, actually there are tree different European programs : the Erasmus program, the Leonardo da Vinci program and the Coménius program. But we'll look at the Erasmus. These programs provide many advantages.
First, according to me, the best advantage of this programme is the fact that Erasmus students can study abroad. Some of students would like to have this opportunity. They discover things that they never saw previously like the customs of the country. However, if you go abroad, you have to leave your family, your home, your friends. A few students may be unable to bear that. Moreover, when students arrive abroad, they feel lonely sometimes but they quickly make a lot of friends. They socialise a lot. Besides, money is not a problem neither. As a matter of fact, all Erasmus students have a grant from the European Commission usually around £1,500 for a one year study period. Like this so, they are not compelled to pay for their accommodation. They are more freer. Last but not least, the Erasmus programme allows the students to develop their language skills but not only that! Actually, after their traineeship, the students are more independant, more confident and more mature.

There are many languages ​​that can people know who are in danger and that certainly could disappear if nobody teach them. If a language is to disappear it is also a culture and heritage that risks being erased too. Unesco to establish a list of all the languages ​​classified as "endangered", there would be 33. To prevent this come to happen some people try to bring tourists stating that they could go on vacation, have a good time while helping to save a language. In England, the French Jersey is now more talk than a thousand people per 8,000 inhabitants. It is only used for administrative purposes or on stamps. In fact, they try to spread this language to stamp means it is a very good solution for tourists and learn a few words of French Jersey.
I think everyone should be concerned about this debate because we must try to preserve all the cultures that exist because they are part of our heritage.

Conclusion: We have just seen that participating in an exchange program can be a rewarding experience for students. While on one hand it to cost a lot of money. The things you see and the people you meet on your journey can teach you something that you will not be able to learn in lessons, in fact, you can become a better person and be open minded.
And participate in saving an endangered language can be very helpful for our heritage. But we must be involved in this benefit spots that is not won and bring even more tourists.