Bonjour ! c'est un très bon travail, je veux juste porter ton attention sur l'intro qui est très importante alors voici quelques corrections :
- First of all I would like to give you a definition of this notion.
- In order to illustrate this notion I attempt to answer the question: why are myths and heros so important to our society ?
- So in the first part, we will see an example of a myth (dit lequel). Then, I will speak about a heroe of fiction (dit qui il est) and finally, we will consider a real hero.