Bonjour , pouvez vous s'il vous plait corriger mon texte en Anglais ?  ( je sais qu'il est très long ,) vous pourriez raccourcir des phrases  tout en traduisant , mais il faut que mon texte soit cohérent. Je dois utilser le préterit , faire 150 mots.
Merci beaucoup de votre courage et de votre volonté

Dear diary,

My name is Lawrence Silver, born in 1680 in Bristol, England. I am a pirate captain aéd I write in this journal to tell about my exciting adventure. One day, when I was on my ship with very good friends, we were helping each other a lot. We were thieves but we had to provide for our families, although I wanted to work.
I didn't find anything. I was at sea with my fellow sailors when, with my friends, we saw a beautiful ship: "Queen Anne's Revenge". I ordered them to go to this ship to collect the gold. We jumped on the boat, it was moving a lot... The captain of the enemy ship shouted, "Do you want to steal our treasure?!". We had prepared to fight when all of a sudden the man went into the trapdoor of the boat and came out with a pretty woman. Then he tells us that he is alone and that he sells women for lack of money. the captain offered us one of the women and we wanted money for ourselves!

The captain looked familiar to me, I thought I had already seen him when he laughed at us and said, "Ah ah ah ah, you scoundrels, you believed me! I'm Edward Teach, aka Blackbeard." Me and my classmates were surprised, how? So he lied to us! That's why this man already seemed to me to have met him, he was the terrible, rich, obnoxious Blackbeard who ruled the coasts of Caroline and Virginia with terror.
Blackbeard called his comrades, who outnumbered us. He asked them to fight us with the sword, and if we defeated them, he could offer us a rare treasure. But the fight was unfair, and horrible, and really stronger, gifted than us. It was a disaster! My companions were pushed into the water filled with dangerous creatures.


All my friends died because of that sadistic Blackbeard who said "Ha, Ha, Ha, Ha, Ha, I think you lost the duel, my poor thief, now we're going to fight between captains" Then, he came towards me, and immediately poked my eye out. I thought I would die in a moment, so I fainted, and didn't move. I felt so bad, I was hot, I was dizzy..... Blackbeard thought I was dead, he laughs "The sharks will be happy to eat him! »
As soon as his pirates tried to lift me up, I quickly defended myself and took my weapon and killed them violently as they did with my friends, I was really furious, that some no longer dared to come near me. The rich captain had his eyes elsewhere, without worrying that I had murdered some of his companions because he thought I was no longer there.

But I proved that I was alive by discreetly running towards him, without him seeing me, and pierced my sword through his back. He screamed with a painful scream, and fell to the ground. I cut off his head, blood spurted out from all sides. I threw his cursed head into the water. I went straight to the basement, there were young girls locked in the dark place, tied up, mistreated. I set them free. They thanked me.
Further on, in an illuminated room, I found many wonderful objects: gold, silver, diamonds, jewellery that belonged to Queen Anne... I was blown away by all this wealth! I took with me everything I could.

Unfortunately, my dear friends were deceased, so I could not share the treasures with them. I was deeply saddened to have lost them, but at the same time, happy to be able to bring back treasures to my family

Merci du fond du coeur !