Bonjour, je suis en Première S et j'ai un dm à rendre en Anglais. Vous pouvez me corriger, m'aider pour les connecteurs logiques, et me donner des idées s'il vous plaît ?
Le sujet :
Like the İtalian philosopher Machiavelli, the antohereos think that "the ends justify the means". Do you agree with this philosophy ? Why or why not?

Voici ce que j'ai fais:


I disagree with this philosophy because it means that if your goal is good you will not be charged for the means that you have used to reach your goal.  According to this logic, after you convince people that your aim have good intentions you can put forward that all methods such as violence, theft, etc. are acceptable. So the anti-heroes are Machivellian because they think that the ends justify the means. On the other hand the famous German thinker I. Kant advert that the means are as important as the ends and thus he invite us to humanity. If the means hurt and afflict someone, it is a behaviour contrary to conscience, so contrary to the humanity. Because is the conscience which distinguishes humains from other animals. It also control our ruthless decisions. After we lost our conscience we become wild and uncontrollable. There is a limit to what we can do, which was drawn by our own scruple. If we exceed this limit, whatever our intention or goal, we have done nothing but selfishness.

Merci D'avance.